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Thou shalt never be abandoned
Thou shalt never be forsaken
For I shall always return

The only words seen upon this page
Written in the stain of ink, sealed
She hath signed her name to them
A purity thou hast tasted but once
Beauty it was, from thy tongue
A sonance from thy lips

Doth they serve
As a first promise
As last words to thee
Unspoken in your leave

Alas, Thou has left in silence
Swept away in a gale

Thou art gone, Alas
©2006-2009 ~RedRedValentine
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Submitted: January 26, 2006
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Forced myself to write something, really quite simple. I like the sound it has to it, though I think the second line maybe too much in the first stanza.
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Wow.. excellent piece. Very inspiring.
Yes, i like the last line in the second stanza, i reckon it sounds awesome when read outloud.

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Ahh ...a gentle sigh.
'Tis simple and beautiful. :)

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Amazing...It actually gave me goosebumps...
I ADORE the tone of this piece. The love and hope portrayed in the first three lines contrasts so beautifully with the loss and sadness in the last three. wow
The second line in the first stanza fits exactly where it should be.Good work,and I like the way it sounds too.

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